Both Machio and Iko sat at a fancy looking restrant. The waiter was a bit perplexed when he walked over, and Machio asked for two menues, but without question, did as he was told. the lighting was a little dim, but the walls a cosey yellow did a good job of iluminateing the area. "Machio....are you sure this doesent....bother you?" Iko asked, stareing down at the Menue. "Hush," he peaked up to her. "you should be enjoying this, not worrying about me".

but what went un noticed to Machio, was that she turned the menue page...by herself it didnt even ocure to her that she did it either. "See anything you like?" Iko frowned , but then smiled. "It all looks so good, il just... have what your haveing".  the student smirked. "that so?... Waiter" he snapped twice, and lifted the menue. "il have two of thease",. "Machio dont be silly I cant eat!". she quickly corrected. "... Er... I ment one". the waiter was sure this man had lost his mind, and nodded slightly.

*Takeing a break* 

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The two had maneged to strike up a conversation, wich led to a few jokes, Machio told her story's of ghosts he met, and she told him about some things she did when she was alive.

"So, Iko....Ever try playing some pranks?". she laughed in return. "What could a ghost like me do?". leaning back in his seat, Machio had a wide grin. "oh, yaknow... there was talk about strange things happening around this town, I was thinking Ghosts did it, like last week a huge dumpster mystiriously rolled into trafic, and there were no fingerprints or footprints to go by". there was a long silence. "But Machio... I cant touch anything".

Machio's gaze drifted to her, her voice alarmed him, he could hear she was upset, and soon, see she was. "I cant eat....cant do school work, cant talk to my friends.... I cant.." her sentence was interupted by quiet sobs. "I cant... I cant touch...." Machios hand reached across the table, to her hand, and he tried to get her attention. "Hey...hey". she looked up to him, eyes watering, and streams of tears down her cheeks, the sight trigered a unfermilier feeling of remorce in Machio. "You dont have to deal with pain...".

"Machio...my hand" both looked down, to see, the Seeker was holding her hand.

"BWAH!" he fell back out of his seat. "Machio?!?" Iko stood up, and every one els around there table also deseated themselves, a man knelt down beside him. "Sir!, Sir!, are you alright?!" but Machio wasent responding, he was knocked out cold, skin even more deathly pail, and suffering a minor cuncosion from the marble floor meeting his head abruptly.

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We will take a brief cut from the Seeker story. Once I Start writeing it some more, I will continue on with it, and eddit it so all of the posts are joined together.

Im thinking I will start on a Fan Fiction instead....

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BLEACH
Fall of the Nephilem

~ First off I would like to say, I do not own Bleach...like you people didnt know that -_-. And im a bit rusty on the locations of everything, so I may refer to places as "the hollow world" or somthing like that :P. thanks and Enjoy.
REFRENCE GUIDE!

Refrence

Hueco Mundo :Home to the Hollows.

Soul society :Home to the Shinigami (Soul reapers)

Zanpukto: The Shinigami's swords. Thease swords usually take the form of a Katana, but each one can be "Releaced" into a new form on the Command of the Wielder (Exsample, Renji's Zanpukto morphs from a Katana, to a large sword that can exstend and wrap around things ect.). but only the more skilled Shinigami may use this.

Zanpukto's almoast have a mind of there own, and house a entidy, wich can also be called out by a talented Shinigami.

Benkai: Benkai is only usable by a verry Powerfull Shinigami. this is one of there moast powerfull attacks. and usually works off of the Shinigami's Zanpukto. (Exsample. Renji's Benkai turns his blade into a massive Serpant, this Serpant can detach its limbs at will, and has a exstream reach to it. where as Byukia's Benkai creates thousends of tiny sword shards that he can direct to cut threw his aponents)

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Chapter one:Erly bird.

It was a peacefull autome in Karakura the leaves in the trees twisted yellow and red. and were now starting to drop from the great tree's, and onto the road.

The children laughed and danced in the leaves, there parents laughing as they watched there little ones. but such simple happyness, did not stretch every where, unfortunetly...

a little boy ran threw past every one, sobbing, he tried to get the peoples attention, but no one even batted an eye, no one could hear his pleas fro help, it was like he was a ghost!... and he was. a chain dangled from his chest, and the scarry monster was gaining on him!.

Only when the beast let out its howl, did the people look around, the breez seemed to be more humid, and somthing was off, but the scene of the monster and the boy went completely un-noticed.

Another howl!. and the chase recommenced, the boy running and screaming for his life.

It was now Seven aclock, thankfully it was saterday, and school would not bother this young man... he wouldent have to go threw the same routien wit some of his class mates, he didnt have to deal with there staires, but, he knew there was still one thing he had to deal with...

"Good Moooooooooorning I-chigooooooooooo!" an older man screamed as he literly flew threw the door. and soared over the hard wood floor to his son's bed. "what the hell!?" Ichigo quickly rolled out of his bed, his dad bounceing off the cusion, into the wall, and slowly slid down onto the floor. "ooooh... my son , you are getting mutch better, yo-" "Dad!, for one morning, can you stop trying to kill me!?". the mornings at the Kurisaki residence usually played out like this....every morning.

"but if I dont keep you on your toe's who will?" his father smugly replied, Ichigo, already dressed, now walked out of his room for breakfast. "showing your back to the enemy?, heh, a mistake.." again, Ishhen was air born. "you wont forg-" he was haltered by Ichigo slamming his door shut. "I know, I know", the young orenge haired boy said, sounding verry exsausted , as he made his way down stairs.

"Ichigo, are you haveing Breakfast!" his sisster Yuzu shouted from the Kitchen, but Ichigo just wanted to get out of the house. "No thanks, il skip thismorning!".

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I realize why I never seem to stay interested with your long stories... nothing ever happens in the beginning.

 

yes, in this bleach story, we have the boy and the ghost, but the actual characters don't do anything besides wake up and debate about breakfast.

I think you should update less often, but write more when you do so that you can get the ball rolling a little bit.

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>_> good Idea.

Now outside, and away from the headache (his dad in this case) Ichigo was going to find a place to settle down to enjoy his day off.

”Ichigo, Heads up” a familiar voice called from behind. It was that cold commanding tone of voice from the Shinigami Rukia always had when there was business to attend to. And as the Student slowly turned around, only to see Rukia running at him, while strapping on a red glove, upon further inspection, Ichigo could see the white skull and blue flames… witch only meant one thing…

”H-hey! Wait!” Ichigo raised his arms in defense. “ I thought we said we weren’t gonna use th-“ he was cut off when Rukia gave him a blow to the chest with her palm, Sending Ichigo’s soul out of his body, witch in turn, left his body laying there on the ground.

 

“There’s no time, Ichigo,” she stood there, and pointed behind him. At first, the substitute Shinigami saw nothing. But then…

a little boy, still running for his life. One he thought he still had. And from it, a Hollow, sliding on its side, fumbling to catch its prêt, as it hopped onto all fours. “Oh my, I thought I was just going to settle for a little ghost…” the Hallow chuckled darkly. “But it seems I can feast on two Shinigami TOO!” It let out another roar. And began its charge.

 

“Rukia…. See this boy gets a soul burial, I will handle the big fella” with a nod, his companion quickly ran, and picked up the boy before changing direction, running away, from the beast.

 

All hollows took on different shapes and Sizes. Though all had a large whole in them to represent there missing heart, and all had a Bleach white Mask. This one resembled more of a Hairless gorilla, its mask, whenever opening revealed rows upon rows of sharp gnarly teeth!

 

“Ready, Zangetsu?” he called to his sword, and took it by the handle, and lept high into the sky, to meet with the beasts head. “Sorry to spoil your supper!, but the only thing your eating is THIS!” he swung his Zanpukto (or, his Shinigami blade). Down to meet with the hollows mask, but he was batted aside, a different force had knocked him away from the Hollow. Slamming into one of the buildings, Ichigo landed in a kneeling position, and looked up to see a man, dressed in a black Kimono, much like all Shinigami’s. “what?, another Shinigami?.. But Rukia was charged to look after this town!”

 

Something was definitely wrong… this Shinigami had no right to be here, and what was up with stealing his kill? He had everything under control. The voice from this Shinigami came uncaring. He drew his own Zanpukto, as the hollow roared to him, and made a swipe for him.

”Rend them to pieces… Kaitou!” (Meaning-sharp sword-Literally) his words “Released”. His Zanpukto, causing it to change forms, going from a Katana, to a even longer sword, but with that, the blade came apart, and what looked like wire stings held each shard at different lengths to the sword hilt, and with a mighty swing, the long shards tore into the hollow, witch in turn, let out its death cry.

 

But unlike a normal hollows death, this one formed into a black mist, and was sucked into the hilt of the Shinigami’s blade. “…How un satisfying…” he complained.

 

“Hey!” Ichigo called to him, and then hopped up to get to his level. “Who the hell are you?” Ichigo asked the stranger, who slowly turned his head, his Shinigami garb was slightly modified, and dark patches of hardened leader lined his shoulders, and came around his neck, the top covering his mouth from sight. “That is of no concern… there was a ghost child… where is he?”

 

As if on cue, Rukia revealed herself with the child in her arms. “Ichigo?”

 

“Ah… Killing you would serve me no purpose… being only a substitute Shinigami and all… but those two” the stranger immediately soared down on his targets. “RUKIA! RUN!” Ichigo called out, and gave chase to the stranger!

 

There was something strange about this man, he held two scabbards, but called out his Zanpukto only using one blade, was he actually able to hold two different Zanpukto’s?

 

Rukia turned around and tried to escape but her pursuer was fast… and relentless, closing in on her, she had to make a decision. Tossing the boy fro her arms, she spun around, holding her own blade now, ready to defend!

 

But as if time stood still, she watched on as the strange came down, one blade outstretched, his other hand slipping to his other side to grab another…Zanpukto.
”Blow them away… haruichiban (meaning-first storm of spring)

an irresistible gust of wind met her, as soon as his awakened Zanpukto met with her blade. Witch was now a wavy long sword.

 

The force sent the Shinigami sideways, the wind was far too strong to stay balanced in, and without slowing, the stranger continued forwards at the boy…

”NO!” Ichigo and Rukia both cried out, but it was too late, when the stranger stood back up, the boy was gone, and his blades turning back to there original form, sheathed in there scabbard.

 

“What the hell are you doing!”? Ichigo landed behind him. Blade in his off hand. “You’re a Shinigami! your not supposed to kill every ghost you see!, y-“ “Listen, Substitute… Do I have my Divisions number on my uniform?” he turned, it was true, all Shinigami belonged to one of the thirteen protection squads, and all wore their number. But this one had the number torn off of his Kimono.

 

“I was a Shinigami before… but no longer, we no longer go by the name Shinigami” “Who the hell are you!” Ichigo demanded, hate in his eyes, and hands trembling due to what this man committed.

 

“As I said before Substitute… that is of no concern to you… when we are threw, Niether real world… nor soul society… nor Hueco Mundo will be left standing”.

 

Growling, Ichigo quickly adjusted to attack! But this stranger merely shrugged, a black portal opening behind him as he stepped backwards. “Nice meeting you, im sure we’ll see each other around”. And before he got an attack off, the stranger vanished.

 

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Theres a hole in the world like a Great black pit and ists filled with people who are filled with ***!.

^Thanks to Eva ^__^ <3

Thats just too bad Break. If you dont like them, dont leave a comment saying you dont, its just rude.

Keep it up Blue! Im loving your work! xx

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~When the world says 'Give up' hope says 'One more try'~

gungrave:

Thats just too bad Break. If you dont like them, dont leave a comment saying you dont, its just rude.

Keep it up Blue! Im loving your work! xx

Nono, its ok really. if he was comeing in here to just Bash my work it would be a difrent story, but I Acept Constructive critisism! :P thanks for careing however, and im glad you like it so far.

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Much better, too bad I'm not familiar with the series. : P

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Break:

Much better, too bad I'm not familiar with the series. : P

You got me thinking...

I doubt there are alot of Bleach fans on this site... I should write a refrence guide so that people can look to thigs that they might not understand!

I will post it up before the story Area : D!.

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 I'm sorry but I can't possibly read your second story until i know the rest of the Pumpkin patch one....*sigh* lol Really cought my intrest but you didn't go on.. I hate it when i can't finish a story. Maybe on your own time you should finish it and get it published instead of finishing it on here. It really made me want to keep reading....very few stories do that for me.

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R-really? o.o;... I didnt think any one really cared for HALLOWEEN TOWN: Curse of the pumpkin rider

:P Sence I was aparently wrong, I will write that on the side, along with Seeker and BLEACH:Fall of the Nephilem

I may edit Halloween town >>... im debateing weather I have to cut some charichters or not, but we'll see. Il try to write some of it and try to keep my attention span on it xD... writeing three story's should give me the flexibility in mood I need to continue on.

>>.... aaand my second story cuts short also so...heh heh XD if you do read it dont hurt meeeeeeeee

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gungrave:

Thats just too bad Break. If you dont like them, dont leave a comment saying you dont, its just rude.

Keep it up Blue! Im loving your work! xx

I think I'll tell my brother what ever the hell i desire thank you very much. If all I could say about his stories was that they outrightly sucked I'd keep it to myself. but I know he, like me, wishes to improve, and you only do that when people tell you there honest opinion. how much good would I be doing him if I pumped his ego full of hot air, only to have him spending 5 years writing a novel that won't do very well? now, my brother could easily be a novelist, but not of the caliber of Tolkin. I can tell you he'd like to one day however, and he's going to get there when people state there honest opinion about his work, rather than lying when he writes something barely readable.

 

ga ga ga da da da

 

 awesome story hu gungrave? thanks to people like you, the illiterate that wrote that will never improve, and live in his own delusional world for the rest of his life, than you very much for poisoning his brain.

 

aaaaanyway, you're doing good blue. keeping the updates big is a good idea me thinks.
 

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Vergil-demon in blue:

R-really? o.o;... I didnt think any one really cared for HALLOWEEN TOWN: Curse of the pumpkin rider

:P Sence I was aparently wrong, I will write that on the side, along with Seeker and BLEACH:Fall of the Nephilem

I may edit Halloween town >>... im debateing weather I have to cut some charichters or not, but we'll see. Il try to write some of it and try to keep my attention span on it xD... writeing three story's should give me the flexibility in mood I need to continue on.

>>.... aaand my second story cuts short also so...heh heh XD if you do read it dont hurt meeeeeeeee

 Sure editing is always a must but i think you have a good baisic idea for the story. need a foundation to build a sturdy house, but you need ambition / motivation to actualy complete it. 

^____^ lol  

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hey hey... ok, -_- im adding a rule that no one is aloud to Critique other memmbers critiques in my thred. lol

im currently working on another chapter for Bleach, and am redrawing out on how I want Halloween town to play out.
thanks for the words of Encouregement Gungrave and Eva. and the Critique Break!.

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Vergil-demon in blue:

hey hey... ok, -_- im adding a rule that no one is aloud to Critique other memmbers critiques in my thred. lol

 

I can see where that would get confusing...  

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