OK i wanna know how other poeplw think nof this storyy soo say whut u think PLEASE

 

One day, the son of Sparda, Dante, got a phone call from an old lady that says she fought with Sparda. She had a request..she asked if dante could fight off demons who were destroyind her town, Dante excepted the request. Dante went to her house and found that nothing was wrong,no demons,no destroyed buildings, no nothing. From the back the "old lady" tried to dropkick Dante in the face,but Dante was smarter, he grabbed her foot and tossed her at a building. "You are smarter than I thought." Said the old lady. "Well I am the son of Sparda." Said Dante. Suddenly, the old ladies skin started to bust open and a huge demon came out."I WILL KILL YOU AND BURY YOU IN HELL!" said the demon. "Well why don't you come and try it?" said Dante. "AAHHH!!" yelled the demon. Dante pulled out Ebony and Ivory and started blasting her in the stomach. No effect, the bullets just blast right back at him, but he pulled out Rebellion and sliced the bullets in half. He took Rebellion and threw it at her. It got stuck in her arm, then he took out Ebony and Ivory and shot the sword until it cut right through the demons arm. Blood flew everywhere. She suddenly started falling apart, all of her limbs on the ground just desinigrated. His fiery soul came out of his body and for some reason the whole town caught on fire,then disappeared. Dante went back to his shop and saw demons tearing it up and bringing it down. Dante got mad and went into Devil Trigger. He defeated every single demon in one blow of rebellion. When he defeated the last demon a note popped out..and the note said "yes i distracted you so I could get to your shop and obtain the sword sparda, then destroy your shop."     "Who is this?" Dante mutteres to himself. At that moment, the note exploded and it was full of knockout gas. Dante woke up in a place that seemed like hell. as soon as he woke up, two swords jammed through his arms, and one went through his stomach, and stuck him on the wall. A figure that resembled Dante's mother walked up and stabbed the sword even harder through Dante's stomach. Blood was dripping off the sword into a puddle on the ground. Memories of Dante's mother appeared in his head. Right there, Dante went Devil Trigger. He was so consumed with anger that he moved his arms and stomach right throught the sword. He took one sword off the wall and chunked it at the figure. The sword went right through her, it didn' even touch her. Dante starts punching at it more and more, faster, and harder. But nothing happened. The figure just laughed and flew away. Dante went out of devil trigger and sat down. "  Whats going on? Was that my mother? If not who was it?" Dante thought confusely.....TO BE CONTINUED

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Father?
I dont have a father.
I just dont like you,thats all.

where's the rest????? i want to know what HAPPENED!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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Interesting, I'd like to know what happened next.

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Mooved this to the correct thred >__>; have fun :D!

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you want to know what i think right... this may seem a little...mean. i'm sorry if it does.

"From the back the "old lady" tried to dropkick Dante in the face" i don't understand how she dropkicks him in the face from the back (or tries too at least). using "smarter" like that seems a bit redundant to me. and i don't think dante would normally answer something like "well i am the son of sparda"  (i just can't see him doing that) he'd probably trashtalk by saying something like "maybe you're just dumber than you thought" (or something along trash talk lines). i also don't think throwing his sword would be something he'd normally do when he hasn't guaged his enemy's strength. it's risky. i don't think Dante would go into DT unless he really needed it. he could just as easily kill the demons without it so DT makes extra work and would then be kinda pointless. and if dante thought that figure could have been his mother, he probably wouldn't attack it.

ok now on to the good things. the note was kinda trivial, yet innovative at the same time because no one would expect that. the way dante killed the first demon was good as well, just shouldn't have happened right away. i also like the idea of using some sort of execution ceremony for dante. it's kinda befitting in its own way.

keep it comming, you'll improve on the way  :D

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the story is good  good job

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kill one thousand you are a hero
kill them all and you are a god

Sorry but this is constructive critisicm. First of all you have Dante's character all wrong. Secondly, DT shouldn't be used so easily. Third, be more descriptive of your surroundings and characters, you would be surprised how much this can extend the story and add depth. Last but certainly not least seperate your dialogue from the action. Other than that good job. By the way, check out my DMC story/Rp(if I can get it going). It is in the RP section under DMC Story(I know really original)

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