hello sos this will kinda be like mich's and Rages forum except they will have a few of my dmc stories with dante fighting vergil but anyway if you have reqeusts ill try to fullfill them and staff of sos please dont lock im begging you PLEASE PRETTY PLEASE

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Zechra, get 'im! LOL just kidding.

 Good luck with the writing Shadow! Hmm... *Thinking of a request*

If I think of anything, Ill send you a PM x x x

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But now... when I look back... the people who should be with me aren't... the people who should be smiling with me aren't here!
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Are sins... ever forgiven...?
...I've never tried.
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(Made for me by Rage)

all right my first story im workin on but heres a small little story  its not that good though

 

Dante:has anyone seen my sword i cant find it

Nero: well i saw verg just sneakin around with it i think

Vergil:Dont Come In my Room! he said nervously

Dante walks in vergils room to see hes destroying dantes sword

dante grabs the yamato an snaps it in half then again and again

then vergil grabs nero and uses him like a club and Neros Shouting

Nero:Dont i get a say in this

D and V: Shut up chore boy !!!!

Dante: Cant you see im tryin to kill him

Nero: thats it ive had enough grabs Red Qeen Gos DT and starts beating on dante and vergil

D And V: AAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Dante: this is your falt this wouldnt be hapening if u didnt take rebellion

Vergil: Wrong brother you left rebellion on your desk just waiting to be taken

They both start bickering  for hours while running from nero and nero cacthes up still in dt and starts beating on D And V

Dante: We have to peform that one move verg

Vergil: Fine its are only hope

D and V: Fusion Ha!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Then when the light clears it Shows Vergil Wearing a red coat

And starts beating on nero

Red Vergil: Now choreboy go clean up the whole town that u destroyed ok good bye Then punches himself in the nuts and says dante!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Dante:Thats for destroying rebellion

   

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i hope u like this one im still thinking of ideas and if u have requests ill help and uh my next story will be about the story with the dantes but first i want to see if any of u have requsts

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It wasn't bad. But I hope you can appreciate some constructive criticism. :)

The biggest thing in the story that made it a little uninteresting was the lack of meaning. You should provide better reasons for the actions of the characters. Otherwise it doesn't serve any purpose and it just seems bland. You should keep this in mind especially if you are going to write longer stories.

Good luck with the writing!

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Sorry coukdnt think of one bye

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Hmm...

(beegiiiiiniiiiingggtooowuuundeeeerrrrrwhyyyyythiiiissstttuuuufffsooouunddssfamiiiiiiilllliiiiiaar)

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Yeah... I'm good.... :)

Just one thing, Shadow. Did you actually get Gungrave's and Rage's permission before writing this story?

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uh i think i did

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Dont you touch her she has nothing to do with this, LET HER GO!!

Well he didnt ask for my permission. How about you Rage?

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But now... when I look back... the people who should be with me aren't... the people who should be smiling with me aren't here!
~
Are sins... ever forgiven...?
...I've never tried.
~
(Made for me by Rage)

um i do believe i did  but uh just one thing im not good at this funny story thing im better at adventure ones not jokes and uh just for asking what do ya think welll u see i was start in to think about your guy's story about the dantes so i madea sequel sorry if i forgot to ask permission but i swear i did

oh now i remember i was typing to ask permission to write but i musta deleted it and thought i asked thats why you guys thought i didnt ask permission  

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Yeah, you deleted it, meaning you didnt actually ASK for permission. Concorde is mine and Rage's joing original idea and you could have got away with slightly by using another inflatable parrot, but using Concorde was beyond stupid without actual permission to use it. Zechra, since you know about this, Im leaving the decision to you.

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But now... when I look back... the people who should be with me aren't... the people who should be smiling with me aren't here!
~
Are sins... ever forgiven...?
...I've never tried.
~
(Made for me by Rage)

Um Shadow Demon, I don't usually criticise people's work but you should really think up your own ideas. It's great to get inspiration and all from others, but directly copying there work I just don't think is right, especially seeing as you didn't ask proper permission (note I said PROPER permission). Don't get me wrong I do wish you luck with your fanfics, just try not to copy others ^_^ Otherwise I'm sure this'll be locked or something, and I know you don't want that.

But yeah, as Mich just said, you shouldn't have directly copied those ideas, especially since the use of 'Concorde' didn't seem necessary. But yeah, as Mich said, I'm sure Zechra, seeing as he knows about this, will make the right decisions about this thread.

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Many thanx to blackhealer for drawing me this ^_^

Blackness covers all I see and all I touch
No feeling of pain just sorrow
My hand loses grip of the sword I held
And I turn to become a true shadow.

(\-M-/) Muah ha ha...Fear the Bunny King!!!
(='.'=)
(")_(")

Seeing as you didn't ask their permission, Shadow Demon, I'm politely asking you to remove the story from your thread. And please make sure that you ALWAYS ask PROPER permission if you are going to use characters created by someone else in the future. Or better yet, only use your own original characters.

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all right im deleting the story now sorry guys i forgot to ask man well uh i guess i can make my adventure stories

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